the top version is infinitely better than the bottom one! this is a very interesting effort, that makes the best use (and most consistent) use of the split screen. it's great that you were able to find mirroring footage of just about every park element, including the dog park, which is totally hilarious. careful with the resizing of the screen, there are moments (1:16 for example) where the proportion of one side changes.
for everyone in the group: these films are short, don't try and do too much! be consistent, stick with one technique, one theme, one site, and push hard.
write about your intentions too!
one thing that might be a bit too much: the decorative title curlicues at the beginning...
Smart way to show contrast scenes through juxtaposition of video.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.